tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5750341687975932111.post7931749785303097277..comments2023-05-02T05:08:20.747-04:00Comments on JD Paradise: The Novice Conquers the Rhythm...JD Paradisehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07945134213244873038noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5750341687975932111.post-87179671521323073722012-09-29T12:41:54.477-04:002012-09-29T12:41:54.477-04:00Thanks, Raphaelite! Who knows. If I ever figure ou...Thanks, Raphaelite! Who knows. If I ever figure out a larger story to tell here, I'd love to do so. Flash is really good for creating little worlds you might want to explore later...JD Paradisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07945134213244873038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5750341687975932111.post-45959550187194791002012-09-29T10:33:53.297-04:002012-09-29T10:33:53.297-04:00I agree with Jo; the story does feel like it is a ...I agree with Jo; the story does feel like it is a part of something bigger. I really like how you included the prompt sentence as an integral part of the story and added the dynamic between the two characters. The only thing is at the end, where he realizes she has really important exams, but then it seems like he just dismisses it by asking if she has a boyfriend and after that, the focus Raywenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16725549462470571437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5750341687975932111.post-71431209406781648842012-09-28T06:11:49.598-04:002012-09-28T06:11:49.598-04:00Thanks, Jo! It does feel like part of something bi...Thanks, Jo! It does feel like part of something bigger, doesn't it? Hrm. Maybe there's more one day...JD Paradisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07945134213244873038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5750341687975932111.post-2325235332458155302012-09-28T04:26:25.275-04:002012-09-28T04:26:25.275-04:00Great story. It feels like a piece from something ...Great story. It feels like a piece from something bigger, and I find myself wanting to know much more about this magical rhythm and the potentially fatal exam.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com